113 學測全國模考英文作文範文賞析 - 逐段解說

內容目錄

題目點評

這篇模考題目命題老師的出題符合大考趨勢，蠻像是 110 學測題目的改寫內容，是一份練習價值蠻高的試題，原因如下：

✔️ 提供１-2張圖片，讓大家能夠根據圖片自由發揮。

✔️ 第一段為看圖寫作，第二段論說文寫作，符合近 3-4 年大考命題採用混合題型的做法。

✔️ 開放學生們選擇自己是否贊成，讓大家有更多發揮空間。

📍總結來說，這份作文試題相當符合近年學測作文的「混合題型」考法（看圖+論說)，第二段也考驗大家在論述時，是否能夠提出強而有力的論點，給予考生相當大的發揮空間，可自由選擇贊成與否。

第一段內文

💡開場

Many high schools often hold school fairs during the semester, celebrating their school anniversary and other special occasions. This week marked a special occasion for Cindy’s high school as they hosted a school fair for the first time in two years, due to the pandemic.

✔️第一段內容，簡單針對圖片內容鋪陳寫作情境。

✔️在看圖寫作中，除了描述圖片內容以外，同學們更應該要注重整體故事的完整性。藉由簡短的內容鋪陳，可以使讀者、閱卷老師更快進入文章情緒。

💡背景

Despite being in their senior year and preparing for the upcoming college entrance exams, Cindy and her classmates devoted a significant amount of effort to making this school fair a memorable event before their graduation. In their class booth, they set up a stall dedicated to making scrumptious and tempting doughnuts.

✔️ Despite + 名詞 / 具有名詞性質的片語

✔️devoted a significant amount of effort to + Ving

✔️scrumptious and tempting 美味誘人的

💡內文

To prepare for the fair, they even brought in a pastry chef to teach them the art of crafting delectable doughnuts, aiming to delight all visitors, parents, and siblings with this gourmet treat. Apart from Cindy’s class, other classes also went all out in the hopes of winning the coveted “Best Booth Award.”

✔️ 避免與上文使用相同單字，用 delectable 增加變化

✔️ Apart from 除了… ，寫作善用連接詞使文章更通順

✔️ 適當延伸劇情，可以讓文章內容更豐富、完整，同時也能加長文章篇幅

💡內文 + 總結

Some classes had a “ring toss” game for children to enjoy, while others sold beverages and soda to provide a refreshing respite (休息、暫緩) from the scorching hot sunny day. All in all (總而言之), this school fair not only attracted the enthusiastic participation of students and faculty from the entire school but also infused the entire campus with energy and a sense of unity (團結心).

✔️ 運用 Some…, will others 句型帶出園遊會整體豐富畫面。

✔️ 在這個段落的結論句，採用正面描述展現積極進取心態，同時也為下個段落將要提出的論點鋪陳。

✔️ 這兩句話都使用簡單、常見的句型，同學們也可以學起來。

第二段內文

💡主題句

In my personal experience, I strongly endorse the idea that high schools should host school fairs, as they hold educational significance and foster class unity.

✔️ 在主題句的2-3句話中，就需要很明確地把接下來論點內容呈現。

✔️ 藉由這樣的方式，可以避免接下來論點偏離主題，也能起到預告的效果。

✔️ endorse 贊同、支持 (v.)

💡論點一 + 支持解釋一

Firstly, organizing a school fair cultivates students’ organizational and leadership skills. Successfully pulling off a school fair relies on (仰賴) the entire class’s ability to manage time and plan effectively, as well as execute tasks efficiently. Through this event, students can develop a sense of responsibility and the capacity to fulfill their duties.

✔️ 第一個論點針對主題句中的 “hold educational significance (具有教育重要性)” 進行闡述

✔️ 針對具有教育重要性又詳細說明為 “cultivates students’ organizational and leadership skills”

✔️ 支持解釋一，再針對 organizational skills 進行詳細分析與說明，整體文章具有高度的連貫性

💡論點一 + 支持解釋二

On top of that, leadership skills are indispensable (不可或缺的). In other words（換句話說）, the class needs several individuals willing to step up as leaders, capable of guiding the team and maintaining composure (保持鎮定) in times of emergencies and conflicts to overcome challenges and obstacles.

✔️ 這邊的支持解釋原本只有後面一句話的長度，第一句特別用了 “leadership skills are indispensable” 來凸顯論點的重要性，也使原本的內容看起來更完整。

💡論點二 + 支持解釋

Furthermore, a class functions as a team, where each member possesses unique personalities and goals. Hosting a school fair can help classmates get to know each other better, enhancing their interpersonal（人際之間的） bonds. At the same time, working together toward a common goal strengthens their cohesion（增強他們的凝聚力） and creates unforgettable memories.

✔️ interpersonal relationship 人際關係

✔️ 這邊的論點主要用來強調第二個論點 – 透過舉辦園遊會，強化人際關係。

✔️ 可特別留意這三句之間的連貫性，每一句都是延續上一句的內容往下延伸、詳述。

💡結論

In conclusion, I believe that by organizing school fairs, classes can nurture their organizational and leadership abilities（論點一重申） during their high school years, making them more competitive. Additionally, it allows the entire class to leave behind meaningful and cherished memories（論點二換句話說） from their high school experience, making it a worthwhile and valuable endeavor.

✔️ 結論句採用保守寫法，再次重申論點，如果擁有豐富的替換字詞，可換句話說。

✔️ 整篇文章的每個論點、段落，都恰當地使用連接詞讓文章更加通順。

✔️ 結論句內容約 2-3句話，把原本論點重新說清楚即可，勿提出新的論點模糊焦點。